Posted 13 July 2006 - 09:47 AM
i had to put this clip on the dreaded Youtube site, although it hasnt done that much of a bad job compressing the footage... any feeback would be appericated =D
Posted 13 July 2006 - 10:32 AM
Edited by Andrew Thorley, 13 July 2006 - 10:33 AM.
Posted 03 August 2006 - 02:54 AM
A pattern I have seen here in this forum is: (i) a lack/fear of dialogue and (ii) to replace it other audio/s and (iii) to justify it, call it 'an experimental film' or simply make it weird.
Frankly, I am unconvinced. Having said that I did like that late 60s/70s feel to the intro. Quite hypnotising music, very deep, deeep, deeeeeep
Posted 03 August 2006 - 04:03 PM
Try using "A Film By" or "Created by" Andrew Thorley. I don't know that you're winning over any fans by trying to impress them with the fact that you wrote, shot, directed and cut it. This is not meant to dismiss your skillset but rather to avoid the laundry list approach.
Should someone find fault with one attribute of your film, they can still be somehwat interested and forgiving. Right off the bat, you've armed them with the knowledge that you did EVERYTHING. The viewer now has one and only one person to blame if the smallest detail takes them out of the story for even an instant.
"If he shot it, why didn't he edit around that camera booble?"
"Well, he cut it too, so maybe he didn't shoot anything better."
"That line was weird. Was it because he wrote it that way or directed the actor poorly?!!??"
I realize you worked hard and it feels good seeing it up there, knowing you can do all those things but have the confidence to go with 'less is more'. They can either be surprised to learn, later on, that you did everything or sufficiently underwhelmed that you 'almost' did everything. I guess I should probably watch the rest to know more. Best wishes.....
Posted 03 August 2006 - 04:16 PM
I'm guessing abortion-related but you can take it further. You've got the camera placed well and can cut, now take it to another level.
Posted 03 August 2006 - 10:02 PM
Posted 13 August 2006 - 10:25 AM
I'd firstly like to apologise for subjecting you "the viewer" to that rather poor excuse of a film "Fanny". To be perfectly honest i don't know why i uploaded it onto the internet, I guess I should have used it as a personal reference point or at least a guide on not how to "do things". But then again I do like my works being criticized =D
As for labelling the genre to experimental, well i put my hands up but when i get thinking about it I don't think there's a genre called "shtty crap films" or is there =P.
Thanks for taking the time to view the film, and i really do mean that and hopefully my next offering won't be as dire as this one.
p.s she did have an abortion
Posted 13 August 2006 - 11:43 AM
My advice on short films: pick a concise little story, but film it in a different way or bring your own look to it. That's not the most original way, but it will allow your film to have originality without falling off the deep end. Other point of advice: be your own critic, if something seems like it sucks, don't just immediately try to justify it.
I liked the opening shot though.