I think the framing is good, you seem to have a solid grasp on the rule of thirds, adequate look room, etc.
Lighting on the characters' faces (at least the girls') tends to be a little dark - they seem to be in the shadows, while their hair has sufficient light. If that's done for a specific effect it can be OK, but otherwise it may be distracting.
As a general statement, the lighting also seems kind of flat and dim - if you're going for a low-key effect, you might want to try increasing the intensity of the key light to increase contrast and better separate the subject(s) from the background.
It might be helpful to get some background information on the story, mood, characters, etc. to better critique the effectiveness of the shots.
Its kind of an educational video with a story wraped around it
The writer?producer is a teacher and he wrote a story around his teachings
The story is these characters go to this house and into these 3 rooms and each room is a metaphor for the subject matter that the teacher is teaching.
I did go for a dark look for 2 of the rooms because i tried to keep the set well lit but keep the light off the actors, because in 1 of the rooms the teacher is talking about objects like,teddy bears,newspapers,chess boards. and how different meanings and memories people get by looking at stuff like that.
I agree the footage does look alot flatter on my computer. It looks alot better on my TV, its actually supposed to be darker,and the highlites brighter, but my computer washes every thing out.
And unfortunatly this is a video made for the internet so thats where the image is gonna end up, but I think you can also buy the dvd online.
As for the girl in the white room,She is darker when compared to the white background, also 1 thing you cant see in the still shot is that highlight on her left cheek and hair is a light I have fading in and out, I think its really effective, but I agree when I see the still shot of the bright highlight it can be a little distracting.