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"Conviction" - short from CineVera Pictures - please critique!


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#1 Brian Posslenzny

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Posted 02 October 2007 - 04:39 PM

Please check out our latest project: "Conviction." As we're trying to get better and better, any critiques would be welcome.

Thanks for looking!
http://www.cineverap...conviction.html

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#2 Ram Shani

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Posted 04 October 2007 - 02:42 AM

i like it very much very good cinematography and you of light to tell the story

good use of soundtrack for the flashback

the only thing is that the actor how plays the boss is so bad and i think the all scene there is falling apart :(

i also think there is problem with the script

i don't understand why its called conviction he is not convicting for any thing not sorry

maybe if at the end after all the beating he fell like his victims and decide to stop killing or he kills the boss and walk as a free man

that's the problem great cinematography will not save bad script and not so good move
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#3 Martin Yernazian

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Posted 05 October 2007 - 12:38 AM

I agree, I find the story pretty poor and the rest of the acting is regular, the cinematography is fair, well done, not great and breathtaking, but nicely done.

So 6/10 for cinematography, 5/10 for the editing and sound
3/10 for the rest

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