I'm completely new to this forum (and site), but I've had a bit of experience on mini DV and 16mm shoots at University (UTS, Sydney, AU).
I wrote an opening sequence, key emotional scene, and treatment for a feature screenplay called 'Bursting' as part of my classes a few years ago but have only just come back to it. I've attached the key scene and opening sequence. The story synopsis is in the 'key scene' document.
Just wanted to get some comments on how this script compares to 'pro' drafts, and any advice on turning it into something more 'shootable'?
I'm thinking about maybe working on it until it's a full length feature script, time permitting.
any thoughts would be greatly appreciated (esp. regarding how I might make the writing more easily interpretable into visual language, too much/not enough stage direction etc...)
(p.s I have no intention of making this film myself....yet!)
openingsequence.rtf 20.17KB 31 downloads
keyscene.rtf 12.52KB 22 downloads
Edited by Ryan Linnegar, 14 October 2007 - 12:49 AM.