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#1 Joshua Tanner

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Posted 04 January 2008 - 08:19 PM

Hi im a young Australian Director & DOP and i was just wondering if you gifted professionals could critique my latest film THE MAN AMONGST TREES, just take note the whole thing was shot on natural light.



Look forward to hearing!

Edited by Joshua Tanner, 04 January 2008 - 08:21 PM.

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#2 Doug Zajaczkowski

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Posted 05 January 2008 - 02:33 AM

I'm not a gifted professional, but that was excellent.

I loved the high shutter throughout, you gave a ton of energy and created a lot of anticipation around the man in black. You have great control over POV and kept me hooked throughout the entire thing. I'd love to hear about the production.

Congrats!

Edited by Doug Zajaczkowski, 05 January 2008 - 02:34 AM.

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#3 Bill Totolo

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Posted 05 January 2008 - 10:56 PM

I loved it, you nailed the tone. Nice editing as well.
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#4 CRISTIAN BALTAZAR

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Posted 06 January 2008 - 07:47 PM

HEY THERE,

VISUALLY YOUR FILM WAS BEAUTIFUL. HOWEVER, THE STORY LEFT MUCH TO DESIRE. I WISH THAT YOU NOT HAD INCORPORATED THE SNEAKERS, THEY DATE THE FILM WHICH IS SOMETHING YOU NEVER WANT TO DO; UNLESS OF COURSE IT'S A PERIOD PIECE. THE STORY NEVER REALLY CLARIFIED WHY THE COUPLE WAS HIKING AND THE MAN IN BLACK SEEMED A BIT CARTOONISH WITH THE TEARDROP NAILS AND THE BIG DARK CIRCLES. THE LOCATION YOU CHOSE WAS BEAUTIFUL, PROPS FOR THAT ONE. I DID LIKE THE USE OF THE SUBTLE COLOR ALTHOUGH IT CAN COME OFF AS A LITTLE CLICHE, BUT STILL VERY WELL EXECUTED. VERY NICE TOUCH WITH THE SCRIPT FONT.
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#5 Joshua Tanner

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Posted 07 January 2008 - 05:30 AM

"THE STORY NEVER REALLY CLARIFIED WHY THE COUPLE WAS HIKING AND THE MAN IN BLACK SEEMED A BIT CARTOONISH WITH THE TEARDROP NAILS AND THE BIG DARK CIRCLES"

The first thing that you must realise with the story is that the Black & White footage is a fantasy in thhe mind of
the taxi driver, the color flashes are fragmented memories and the people in the back of his taxi are incorporated
into this daydream and encounter the same events that have tormented the taxi driver.

The black suited man is abstract because he's just a doll in the real world. You can see the young boy holding it,
and him holding it again when he is older, the taxi driver at the end. In his fantasy the man takes the image of
the doll, the doll is him, and though the color flashes you should see his connection with the doll.
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#6 Aliakbar Campwala

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Posted 07 January 2008 - 06:09 AM

loved the tone which created a spooky feel...liked it..good work mate!
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