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#1 Mark Williams

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Posted 06 April 2008 - 10:41 AM

I have written a script and to TRY to give a flavour of what it might look like I made a concept opening for the first few minutes. I'm limited by budget scale and signed actors! But hey who cares! So please have a look at my concept/test OPENING.. And maybe leave some thoughts?
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http://www.mydeo.com...D...&CID=177563

This was the script.

FADE IN:
EXT. SPACE. SAMS SMALL CAPSULE EARTHBOUND
A Sun explodes. A massive violent explosion. Whizzing
across this landscape. A black capsule "Whoosh? flies
through space. Through warped images. Space the scale of
distance as a horizon disappears into infinity.
Images of strange shapes and ghostly appearance. Like
mirrored reflections and lights. Ghostly contortions of
stars and galaxies as they move slowly.
The universe. Contorted by the capsules faster than light
speed.
A lifeless looking cold frozen body. A light ?glimmering?
can be seen as we break through the capsule wall. A voice
can be heard. This V/O is a pre-recorded message and heard
from Sams POV. It can be used as a background to the
journey as required. It can be loud soft or indiscernible.
(The first part though does contain a plot point. The
learning program enables them to later design the new
Battle simulator prototype and for convenience is in
italics.)
DOCTOR BOUGHTON (V.O.)
This is Doctor Boughton Sam. "This
Mission is one way. Your going
Home. Your Destination? Your
Place of birth.
A small drill. Drills into sams head. A clear plastic pipe
with robotic equipment moves down the tube into his Brain.
DOCTOR BOUGHTON(CONT?D)
I?ve made a learning program to
help you operate their machinery.
It?s being adapted to your
Genetic makeup It will enable you
to operate their transportation.
This program will run completely
independent of you and still be
accessible by your conscious
mind. The inhabitants defined by
our Analysis model are at a low
level of technology. But
undoubtably under review by the
Artec intelligence control life
scan systems. Once there your
high alpha wave activity should
lure them in. Our assessments
show this has an 90% probability,
providing of course you stay
unknown until the Artec life scan
systems locate your position.

Once you reach your destination
you?ll know enough of their
customs and knowledge to live
undetected among them.
Outside Sam?s craft flies through the universe. Past gas
Nebulas. Through meteorite storms. Etc. A visual spectacle
of the universe?s wonder.
Sams craft approaches earth and flies downwards. A
different light comes on, and the process of bringing Sam
to waking consciousness begins. Close up of Sam stirring.
DOCTOR BOUGHTON (CONT?D)
If they become suspicious your
not one of them. Isolate
yourself. They are approaching a
more advanced level and can be
unpredictable. Acquire one of
their dwellings and wait. Then
remain hidden and stay away from
trouble.
The V/O Continues until the end of this sequence.
EXT. SAM GETS OUT OF HIS CAPSULE. - NIGHT
Sam?s craft lands on the bank of a lake at night. He gets
out and reaches back in for a bundle. The craft takes off
automatically. He throws the bundle over his back and sets
out for the town. Looking up he sees the moon and across
from it Orion his home. He can see it?s so far away.
EXT. SAM WALKS ALONG A MOTORWAY. - SUNRISE
He walks along a Motorway and past a big sign. Early
morning. sunrise.
EXT. SAM IN TOWN. - SUNRISE
Sam has arrived in town. In front a newspaper stand with a
cafe next to it. Lots of sights, cars trucks. He looks at
the papers and pulls one out he looks at it and we see in
his mind?s eye the learning program deciphering the
language. He pulls out some money looks at the coins
strangely before giving them to the seller who reacts
indifferent to Sams odd behaviour giving him his change.
CUT TO. Sitting in an all night cafe with a bought
newspaper he circles a rented house.
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Posted 06 April 2008 - 04:16 PM

Sorry about this I mave have given a link that plays up! So here is another. :)

http://www.mydeo.com...D...&CID=177563
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Posted 07 April 2008 - 01:56 AM

Forgot to mention. This was my first film using the EX-1. Using green screen was great. As for picture quality judge for yourself.
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Posted 07 April 2008 - 03:27 PM

A match for the Red?
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Posted 08 April 2008 - 07:42 AM

I made a lower quality version some people had trouble watching it because of its size.

http://www.mydeo.com...D...&CID=178163
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Posted 09 April 2008 - 04:01 PM

If anyone is interested there is a website for it now

http://www.freewebs....iams/index.html

http://www.mydeo.com...D...&CID=177563
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Posted 10 April 2008 - 12:59 AM

I think as no one else wants to I will review my own work and Im fine with that.

This was first of all nothing more than a step up from a storyboard (I did make this clear) with the aim of getting an interest in the script.

I could be clever though and say the effects fall short of a cinema standard or the voice over was not great. The use of stock footage was not inventive and the pace was a little slow editing needs to be tightened and titles were not working.

I accept that.

However £40 doesnt buy much except paint the idea was to portray an idea. the editing was to establish a different aproach and to centre on a different POV. Sams one. Perhaps this doesnt work. Although as a real film would settle down its reasoning would soon be understood. Also there are missing scenes due to the shortage of money and also the fact its not a film but an illustration I hoped would be enough for people to get an understanding and perhaps want to read the script.

Personally I think value wise this was not bad. Imagine what I could do with a thousand pounds let alone a proper budget. Overall I think though I need to go back to the drawing board with a script rewrite and a better concept film.

Thank you to the people who have watched and your time.
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Posted 10 April 2008 - 05:10 PM

Well Mark, I do like the concept you've put together, I don't really have any comments that reflect the photographic work you've done as it's hard to critique stuff like this as it's allowed to look a little rough around the edges - the shots of the eye and the drill going into the head look great. The compositing looks pretty good on the EX-1.

To be honest (I hope you don't mind), I almost switched off when I saw the 'Alien Wars' title. Unless your going to do an all out epic war movie set on some Alien world with a cast of millions, then Alien Wars sounds a bit too straight-to-dvd-ish.

As it is stands all I know about Alien Wars is it's about a guy who returns home to London from space (so far I'm not sold on film). As a trailer it needs to be tighter, more concise. If the film is about a guy who returns home from space and then war breaks out then I'd expect it to see something that hints at what is going to happen after the guy returns home and is done looking for an apartment in London.

Again I like what you've done, but I'm yet to be sold on the idea.
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Posted 11 April 2008 - 01:07 AM

Hi Earl

Thanks for that!

Obviously I dont want to give to much of the plot away but the film would be set on earth with political comment as well as a love story and Sams growth from finding his roots to resolving his past. Its a story of hope and one mans triumph over his past. The film opens with a homage to past sci fi stories before becoming and using the latest in FX and style.

This is the tag line for it


Sam Smith volunteers for a one way mission to earth in a plot to stop the war being waged against his people. His intention to be captured.. The result ? Earth Unintentionally dragged into the war too. Sam has an amazing ability. He can operate an advanced War machine capable of fighting a ruthless enemy.. He has nothing to live for. Saving his people by sacrificing himself seems like a career move. Until he meets Elsa and he finds a reason to live, and ultimately to save us all..
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Posted 11 April 2008 - 01:29 AM

Will.. This was to portray the opening minutes of a potential film and IS NOT A TRAILER! :) Easy mistake because it does look a little that way However If this was a trailer really I'd have to resign.

I bought the EX-1 and decided to set myself a task to film the opening first minutes of my script. My hope was to try to share my vision and to bring to life what I have written.

There is a concept trailer here but obviously would be far removed from any finished film. I think those wishing to see a trailer for the film will find this much better.

http://www.mydeo.com...D...&CID=154394
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Posted 15 April 2008 - 02:33 AM

Mark, very impressive trailer, it's just a little complex for my taste, there is sophisticated computer animation,
seems that there is just too much variety, it looks more like a demo reel than actual movie trailer, I guess for my taste I'd like to see some emotional continuity, clear character, his dilemma, etc., you know elements that constitute the film, also think of a dominant color treatment of your film, it's also all over the place imho.

Great effort.

Cheers!
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Posted 15 April 2008 - 04:33 AM

Mark, very impressive trailer, it's just a little complex for my taste, there is sophisticated computer animation,
seems that there is just too much variety, it looks more like a demo reel than actual movie trailer, I guess for my taste I'd like to see some emotional continuity, clear character, his dilemma, etc., you know elements that constitute the film, also think of a dominant color treatment of your film, it's also all over the place imho.

Great effort.

Cheers!


Wow Thanks Oleg. Yes the thought about colour and its use has been on my mind. Thats something I can think about redoing. All the scenes in it are taken from the script though..

If only I had my lead actor and a crew with some great 3D artists to make this. Hell I'd probably go on and make the film!
If I had a wish come true if I ever got fortunate enough to be trusted to make it then everything would be up for discussion. I'd want creatives designing from my templates and ideas.

The most important thing in my opinion though would be the target audience. Those amazing people who go the cinema.. :)
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