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#1 John Young

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Posted 08 August 2008 - 08:54 PM



Please critique this short. It was rather spur of the moment. As I don't have any other crew than myself, I did all the work. I even wrote the score, which is suppose to mimick John Adams/Phillip Glass. I really havent delved into Minimalism much as a composer, and usually stick to sudo-neo-romanticesque.

Any comments or criticizem welcome!

P.S. I really can't spell, and as my spell checker is not working at the moment (and I don't feel like finding my dictionary), I hope you will not be destracted by my poor spelling.


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#2 Christopher Santucci

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Posted 09 August 2008 - 11:07 AM

Nice. Good work. Nice composition.

I think the aspect ratio is off (too wide.)

I like the EKU jab, but it might be funnier (if that's important to you) if you left it at: "It accepted my money... of course."

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#3 Robert G Andrews

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Posted 09 August 2008 - 05:14 PM

My frank 1c worth:

Was your choice of a 12:3 letterbox as poor as your choice of marrying irritating piano & sanguine poetry with quite ordinary camera shots, that is the question... :unsure: :blink: :P

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Posted 10 August 2008 - 10:38 AM

My frank 1c worth:

Was your choice of a 12:3 letterbox as poor as your choice of marrying irritating piano & sanguine poetry with quite ordinary camera shots, that is the question... :unsure: :blink: :P

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What would you have done? I chose 2.35:1 because I like that aspect ratio. Some people don't like minimalistic music, however I felt it complemented the mood of this piece very nicely. Phillip Glass has scored lots of movies in the past with music just like this. I never clamed to be a minimalist composer, and even I don't think I am good at it.

I'm no actor, but working by my self has its advantages and drawbacks... so your stuck with the "sanguine poetry".

And what is wrong with ordinary camera shots?
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#5 Adrian Sierkowski

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Posted 10 August 2008 - 10:44 AM

It didn't look like 2.35:1 to me as a ratio, but that's moot.
Generally you see super-wide screen for very big expansive shots. I think 16:9 (1.78:1) would've better rendered a claustrophobic feel to the piece, but that's just me.

I do quite enjoy Glass, though.
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Posted 10 August 2008 - 12:58 PM

It didn't look like 2.35:1 to me as a ratio, but that's moot.
Generally you see super-wide screen for very big expansive shots. I think 16:9 (1.78:1) would've better rendered a claustrophobic feel to the piece, but that's just me.

I do quite enjoy Glass, though.


Now that I think about it I quite agree with the claustrophobic feel that the 1.78 would have given it. Perhaps i'll go back and explore that option. YAY NLE's....
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#7 Christopher Santucci

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Posted 10 August 2008 - 03:26 PM

The aspect ratio is actually 3.8:1 and looks a bit distorted.

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