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#1 Michael Smithers

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 12:26 AM

Hello all!

This is a piece that I shot for school that is supposed to represent a dream-like state and I'm interested to hear your thoughts/comments so I can improve my work.



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#2 Phil Rhodes

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 04:55 AM

Ouch.

Trying to quit, are we?

If it's as tough as that makes it look, you have my very deepest sympathy. I guess that makes it a success as a short film, eh?

Bit long, perhaps. Didn't feel like it really introduced any new topics beyond about half way through. Don't labour the point.
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#3 Bill DiPietra

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 10:25 AM

Definitely surreal enough to make me believe it was a dream sequence without you even telling me. But a bit overwrought, in my opinion. It gets the point across, but does so in way that it kind of wacks the viewer over the head with a sledgehammer rather than being subtle about it. Very often, all you need is some filtration or color tinting to make the viewer believe that he or she is watching a dream sequence.

Edited by Bill DiPietra, 20 January 2013 - 10:26 AM.

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#4 Michael Smithers

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 11:54 AM

Thanks guys. Very helpful feedback. On to the next project..
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#5 Phil Rhodes

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 11:56 AM

If I were you, I'd go back and cut some junk out of it, and see if people think it's any better.
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#6 Michael Smithers

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Posted 20 January 2013 - 12:10 PM

I agree Phil. Thanks for giving your time to help a fellow filmmaker.
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#7 Lee Tamer

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Posted 30 January 2013 - 12:35 PM

great visuals but i agree, a bit long
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#8 Michael Smithers

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Posted 30 January 2013 - 02:34 PM

Thanks Lee
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