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My first (very) short film "Body"


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#1 Damian Hetman

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Posted 05 November 2013 - 06:31 AM

Hi! I hope this is the right place to post it. This is my new short film "Body". It's in polish but I made subtitles in english. I've been filming it last saturday with few friends. It was our first film. Please comment ;) 



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#2 Bill DiPietra

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Posted 06 November 2013 - 02:29 AM

There were no subtitles but I had my hand over to bottom part of the screen the first time I watched it anyway: I wanted to see if I could follow the story by the images alone and I did. Good job of visual storytelling. That's what it's all about.
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Posted 06 November 2013 - 05:54 AM

There were no subtitles.

You must click "Captions" button near the button where you set quality.

 

Thanks for comment :)


Edited by Damian Hetman, 06 November 2013 - 05:54 AM.

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#4 Nicholas Bedford

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Posted 05 December 2013 - 06:46 AM

Well done with it! Pacing was great, shots looked great and the dialogue was pretty natural. Only thing is the ending. Was it the ending? It felt like we were halfway through act 2 that's all.

Also, I felt that there could have been another shot or two to lead up to him slamming into the tree to help the pacing of that very moment.

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