Well I know for a short you have to give what the point of the story quick like at the beginning. I just didn't get how I was supposed to relate to the story. Who were the guys with the gun? What did they want? Why did they want the code? The girls had her dads code or was it actually the girls code? Why would the girl have her dads code?
Either way I do think it was shot well. I like how you had the computers point of view. Lighting was good
I like the edit for the most part just when you see the guys with the gun it should have been from the computer screen not the reverse angle away from the computers.
These are just my opinions of the story. I liked what you did just felt lost.
Keep it up!