Science fiction short film
Posted 29 September 2015 - 08:47 PM
Posted 30 September 2015 - 02:52 AM
Still, cool idea!
Posted 30 September 2015 - 12:19 PM
Posted 01 October 2015 - 02:43 AM
I found this work really quite satisfying and intelligently done in a number of ways, and in particular the humour was refreshing - in particular that first time the protagonist sits in the chair. I had a good laugh because it's self deprecating. The premise of the film is completely hokey but the chair episode makes fun of that hokeyness - there is a glimpse of a kind of a greater reality behind what we're otherwise seeing.
My only criticism would be in relation to the clocks. It seems to me it would have been far better not to show the clocks at all. In the scene between the kitchen window and the shed is revealed what has happened. Enough so the audience can put two and two together. But the clocks, in a sense, give it away - 'telegraphing' the outcome as it is said. And as if we didn't already get it, we're knocked over the head with it again, afterwards. Its so much better to let the audience get it (or not as the case may be - their bad), rather than knocking them over the head with it.
But that said, it didn't bother me that much.
Perhaps the only other criticism would be the lack of a twist in the end. Although the time travel thing is a twist it's not one I'd find concludes the story, because it opens more questions than it answers - in effect starting a new story. And this is wrapped up somewhat too quickly with the two figures becoming one again. There are still too many questions, and the only way to close that off is to undermine that in some way. Perhaps something along the same lines as the humour exploited earlier. Some sort of punctuation which says - this is the end of the film - but not the end of the story.
Posted 01 October 2015 - 08:06 AM
Thank you Carl.
Posted 01 October 2015 - 05:54 PM
The film does end with a very full sense of there being more to come. Indeed I easily read this film as the first part for a larger story. So I'm very much looking forward to what might come out of this.
My second note was how this particular work/episode/pilot might be concluded, (or any other episode), rather than how the larger story might be indicated or elaborated. In other words this work does succeed in indicating more to come.
But there is a lack of an answerable question, particular to this episode. It doesn't need to be, or indeed want to be, related to the larger story (bigger questions). It can be, or indeed should be, off on it's own tangent. And it can be purely perfunctory - a way of saying that at a fundamental level this work need not require any more episodes (before or after). That any questions one might have with respect to a larger story do not actually need any answers - be it in this episode, or any other episode ... because the more pressing answerable question is ... [whatever that happens to be] ...
Edited by Carl Looper, 01 October 2015 - 06:00 PM.